User blog comment:Fantasy Detective/Pokemon SOF! Chapter 1: First Jolly Steps!/@comment-24094348-20140623234731

Great Job FD. However, I would like to make a suggestion. When I was reading the chapter I kept having a hard time imagining the pokemon. It is not a fault of the writting, but rather my fuzzy memory on the pokemon themselves, there is like over 300 of them now,. I would suggest putting up a picture of the type of pokemon in the chapter like you did the trainers.

Now that that part is done I can now comment on the good parts. I like the team attacks you did with the mud and the sand. The story flowed well and I liked the part with FD parents. In truth they remind me of how me and my brothers act. I especially like the part were his mother called him a idiot. I thought that was funny. Anyway the story flowed good and I could understand it.


 * Inster serious facer* I do however demand more Ursaring. I FREAKEN LOVE URSARING!!! HE WON ME SO MANY POKEBATTLES.