Talk:Graveyard of a Madman Part 9/@comment-24070327-20150303123827

Off to a good start. Thoosa silliness in tact so I'm happy with that. Got me really curious about who she was chasing after before. Can't help but to feel that it'll become important later. Kishishi.

Some physiological problems such as the presence of a nose, Cyclops don't have noses, but otherwise all is well and good. Only personality problem would be the slight concern for how she is seen by others. In general, Thoosa wouldn't care if you saw her as a slut or not. She is pretty confident in her identity for spoilery reasons.

As for the beginning portion of the story, I couldn't help but to chuckle at Nikk tattooing portions of her diaries onto her back. Like Alice said, seem a bit extreme to the point of hilarity. Though I can't help but to worry that doing such a thing is going to backfire somehow, someway. I know it isn't likely, but I'm the paranoid type. And this IS a One Piece story. Crazier things have happened...

Either way, you're doing good Rinji-sensei. Keep up the good work and remember...houe is watching- GAK! -gets pecked in the eyes by a pair of eagles- -_- ...damn it!