Talk:Wings Of The Wind: Chapter 3/@comment-4080028-20131122221056

Very interesting chapter, Kai. The title already got me hooked, leaving me wondering "ooh, I wonder what kind of chapter this will be." As I read through it, I could easily picture the action as you described it. I sort of already guessed Kai would win, since I thought there would be no way you'd have him lose here, but the way in which he won was as much of a surprise as any other.

The Arena Fatio was a rather interesting desperation move. Just thinking back on the fact Kai used it at all speaks volumes to me of how badly he wanted to get out of there. And I don't exactly blame him. It's one thing to say "oh, he was a slave, forced to fight for someone's amusement." It's another to depict the inhuman torture placed upon the slave in detail. Gave me a real sense as to how bad Kai had it in Tartarus. Speaking of the name Tartarus, this truly did feel like an 'escaping the bowels of Hell' sort of story to me, like how the Impel Down arc was written. Whether it was intentional or not, and I'm assuming it was, it was very well thought out, Kai. :) Bravo!

I also had fun readng the action going in in this deathmatch scenario. Nothing like a win or die situation to really grab the attention of a reader. Have to say, if I haven't said so already, Kai's quite the badass. I know I could understand that from his page alone, but there's something about seeing a character in action that really drives the point home for me. I have to admit, he's a bit heavy on the rational side for me, as far as I can tell from 3 chapters, as I prefer brawler types like Luffy, but all in all, he's not a bad character at all. While I'm not one for a strategic fighter as a main protagonist, Kai still comes off as badass all the same to me. In short, while not my preferred type of lead, he's still an awesome dude.

With Tartarus behind him now, I look forward to what the future holds for our former slave sylph.

...Oh! And as usual, I'd like to point out there weer some typos and mistakes throughout the chapter. But I was told by someone (either you or someone else, can't recall,) I shouldn't have to stress out over detailing every mistake, and just mention the typos in general; thus allowing the writer to proofread the material on their own and correct the mistakes they missed. And so I'm gonna follow that advice, especially considering how lazy I am. Hope you don't mind, seeing as you're busy enough as it is.

Great chapter, Kai. ^_^ Wings of the Wind is turning out to be a fun story.