Talk:The Masked Warrior of Sarabanto, Part 2/@comment-4080028-20131211074822

Another fun read, bro. :) I mostly enjoyed the exposition and humor. I'm grateful to have learned more of what's happening on this island, and I was simply amused by the more comical reactions the Obsidians shared amongst themselves during their talk with Caspian. Even Caspian's shock regarding Dimitri's unorthodox body, and as you put it, his "warped logic" made me laugh. If anything, I think this was one of the more funnier chapters of Obsidian Voyage, though at the same time, it certainly didn't drown out the more serious aspects, such as explaining what's happened to the mayor, and the true nature of Rokku the Invincible. These key points have made me further interested in seeing how this chapter plays out till its end.

Speaking of Dimitri, I'm glad to see it wasn't anything too serious, though I have to admit, if I was George, Byrn or Livingstone, I'd probably slam my face into a table too. XD I liked the creativity and humor surrounding Dimitri's condition, as it felt like a genuine scene right out of One Piece, while at the same time, this felt like an equally, genuine Obsidian Voyage moment too, given the style in which you write.

Also, I was happy to see Jessica finally make progress on discovering how to use her Devil Fruit powers. I loved the way you portrayed it, since it felt so fantastically surreal, and yet entertaining to imagine in my mind. I think that one moment was the real jewel of that final scene, so it felt like pure artistry to me when I reflected upon it just now. And I think it really says something that the moment Jessica smiled, I smiled with her. This chapter was very nicely done, 13th, and I'm glad you managed to publish it as soon as you did. ^_^

Of course, there are a few mistakes again, in terms of spelling and grammar, but seeing as you mentioned something about the new wiki layout messing with your writing, it'd be understandable that this sort of thing would occur. Terribly sorry it happened to you at all though. But on the plus side, it didn't hinder my ability to read part 2 of chapter 7 at all, and it certainly didn't detract my enjoyment from reading it in the slightest.

Once again, you've shown me why I recommend your story to others, why I feel I could do better in writing up One Dream, and why I like the Obsidian Pirates so much. I'm looking forward to more when you get around to it. :)