Talk:Padrino Part 23/@comment-4080028-20131107055314

My head's kinda full of conflicting thoughts and different subjects right now, so it's hard to focus on anything One Piece related, but I gave it a shot and this is the result: It was a decent chapter, Rinji. Now, as I said on the chat, Lee's interaction with his former crewmates actually did make me feel pity for the guy, though that doesn't mean I'm excusing his betrayal of the Tiger-Stripes, and neither am I hating them for distrusting and ostracizing Lee for the most part. Just that the way you worded it, how he sought something he thought he wanted, tasted success, and then realized he lost something truly precious in the process feels... what's the word? Poignant? But it's done really well, and helped me feel both how the Tiger-Stripes feel and how Lee feels. Call me a sap, but I care enough about both of them that I just want to see both sides make up and be happy again.

Jiro unveiling an ability I'm not too familiar with right now was interesting. If it's enough to rattle Lee, a guy who went toe to toe with Chio on a few occasions, then it has to be impressive. Jiro's shaping up to be a wild card in my opinion, and an interesting one at that.

Finally, well, there's the White Blades. Seeing Molli stride through casually and knock away any obstacle keeping her from Kala was pretty cool. Definitely did a good job at showing she's a top notch swordsman; especially considering the badass feat of being blinded and still navigating through the noise coming from others. It was pretty cool to see Snowbeard show up unexpectedly and frighten away the Marines, and I was happy to see Kala finally freed from her cell. After almost 10 chapters of being stuck there, I can imagine why she'd be so happy to see her beloved "family" again.

However, this felt like a short chapter to me, as I breezed past it with little effort. I also felt like it lacked the same quality as previous chapters. Now I honestly can't say for certain what it is I'm not seeing here, since this is just a gut feeling, but it probably has to be the lack of any seriously big twists, amazing action scenes (though Jiro and Molli counted for something) and that touch of comedy of yours that I've begun to know you for. Thus, this chapter felt kinda flat; almost like written filler. However, that doesn't make it a bad chapter. It was well written, I could make out what I was reading, and it pushed along the plot nicely. Good work on this chapter, Rinji. But despite that, I kind of wish there was a little bit more to it.