Talk:Lissandria Kingdom: A Fight for Love/@comment-4072803-20170114204901

And thus, the second installment of the revival is here!

~Zeon's Review Pirates!~

The writing here was okay-ish. I won't be really critiquing grammar since I do believe that English is not your first language, and even then I had no problems following the story at all. It did make some of the fights confusing at points, but not in a game-breaking fashion. I normally don't like the use of chat emoticons in story-format (at least when they're not actually there but just the typing that calls them forth), and that still holds true, but it did lend this particular story a feeling of casualness and lightheartedness that made it easy and at times pleasant to read. Your crew proved pretty entertaining as well. The manner of their introduction left a bit to be desired and I'm still not sure I can name all of them or tell them all apart, but overall they gave a nice and fun OP-vibe, especially with their casual and comedic dialogue.

The plot was pretty by-the-numbers, and almost in some ways felt like you were trying to mash an entire arc into one story, but without the way the movies do it in order to have it still resonate. It feels unremarkable in that sense, and the quickness of the fights hurts it a bit as well. We're told impressive things about our main villain, Barolo, but in the end he's not seen doing anything special and seems defeated too easily. The villains themselves seem taken out too easily and the fights lack suspense. However, the powers were decently fun, and I love that piano fruit. Crazy, creative powers like that are what make battles more interesting.

All in all, it was a decent story that moved at a brisk pace. It lacked emotional impact or resonance (though I can see you appeared to be going for it on some moments and you came a bit closer towards the end), but was far from boring. It's definatley made me like this crew and I wouldn't mind seeing more of them.

Final Score: 0.7/1 Piece