Talk:Grand Voyage- Log 11/@comment-4080028-20150403014944/@comment-4072803-20150403045039

Well, thankfully, you're pointing out a lot of the problems I have myself about the overall Sid Arc. Thankfully I got to have more fun with the action at the end (which should be coming in a chapter or two, I hope >_<) but, to be brutally honest with myself, I started the Sid Arc in the hopes of telling a more politically-intrigued story... Didn't really work and I ended up scrapping those elements towards the end and focusing on shonen-esque action. The Stormy Arc, I believe, ends up fixing a lot of these problems as the major plot elements start appearing rapidly from the very end of the first/most of the second chapter, but the Sid Arc I find kind of lackluster in this regard.

As for the overall writing style, I like to think that I improve and keep it more tight and focused than it ended up here. Though due to my own previous writing experience of writing more traditional prose that might prove more difficult, I'm trying to keep it as close to OP as possible, or at least a light novel format of sorts. Hope it actually turned out that way (and if it helps, such discretions such as Gunther's in the future are, if my memory serves, for a sort of comedic purpose in a way, with more important characters).

Anyway, as previously mentioned, I think/hope that a lot of the problems with the Sid Arc come from me attempting to write something deeper with it that I really couldn't. So I apologize for the whole political intrigue stuff, it's... blehh.