Talk:Celestial Tournament! Chapter 14/@comment-4004918-20131208090356/@comment-4080028-20131208233757

Just dropping by to point out that Ika is one of my story's four main protagonists. I have given Zoro-san (or as I call him, Santoryu) the permission to use Ika for this story. Any techniques he uses aside from his Guillotine attacks were made up by Santoryu himself.

I haven't read any of the chapters up to this point yet, but I thought I should check this out now, as I get pretty anxious about my own characters being written by someone else.

@Santoryu: May need to inform you that some things don't exactly add up, and may require you to rewrite some details concerning Ika. Not really your fault though, seeing as I worked a bit more on Ika while you were writing these past two chapters. Firstly, he's either going to be addressed as Ika, the leader of the bounty hunter group, the Ika Bounty Hunters, or as "Hassan," the captain of "The Rebel Pirates." So in essence, his secret really isn't busted, and he's not a real pirate captain at that. It's gotta be one of these and not the other as well, since he can't be two different people at once without being listed as a criminal, which would be bad for his career.

I'm sorry for the late update, but I didn't know you were going to write that. Anyway, nice action as usual, and the comedy was nicely put. Cool names for Ika's techniques by the way, and I liked how he used his Devil Fruit powers. Personality was written well, and he seemed to be pretty in character, though I'm not sure if he'd be that easily scared of someone actually being a challenge for him. If he's going after big game, then it's only natural he'd be fighting monsters like Kenshin or Miyaki. Though that's just my opinion regarding all this.

Referring to someone who holds no bounty at all as "pocket change" doesn't make much sense to me either. I can't really see Ika calling someone with no bounty that, as there'd be no reason to do so. It'd be like calling a Marine "pocket change" because they don't have bounties. If it's necessary to give Miyaki a nickname here, then maybe it could be something else? He has an afro, right? Maybe Ika could simply refer to him as "afro" if you don't want him calling Miyaki by his real name; though I don't see why he wouldn't use Miyaki's real name, as there's no reason not to. Ah well...

Enough rambling from me. Thanks for including one of my characters, Santoryu. :) Hope he was (and maybe even possibly still) of some use to the Celestial Tournament story.