Talk:Walk in the Rain Part 4/@comment-3507136-20150109154241

Ok, now I know you're probably expecting a blast filled comment from the almighty Ferno! but. you'd be wrong... I actually was able to relate to this chapter quite a bit. I'll explain how so shortly. But I liked the feel this chapter gave me. It felt. One Piece to me, but from a different perspective. Not sure how to explain it but this is probably one of the chapters I've had next to no problem with.

I could relate to this chapter purely from Rinji's nightmare, when I'm ill it is usually nothing to worry about and I can tank through work, social events and even a party without infecting another soul or showing that I'm genuinely ill. But when it is a horrible or worrying ill, it starts with nightmares in my sleep. And I could definitely relate to Rinji with this, albeit his was seemingly through guilt and self-doubt. But nonetheless, relatable, very poetic too. It was good to see this.

As for the problems with this chapter? Only two really... and they're not really problems, just little Ferno things.

The first one is that as Nada has stated below, I think it is "rack" and not in fact "wrack". If I am wrong though I apologise... And I will rain my fury of embarrasment upon Nada like surprising attack of a sour grape in a pack of sweetness.

The second one was the seeming detective work by the fellow crew mates? I mean... one minute we're defacing a marine, next we're escaping the marines (Both understandably related), but now we are hidden in canyons doing an investigation of apparent murders? Or am I missing something? This confused me tbh as it seemed to change to this subject rather oddly.

Despite this, I liked the flow of conversation between characters as well as more crew time than captain time. It's always nice to see that every now and then. What I'd like to see a bit more though is perhaps banter between crew members? Or a little bit of comedy applied to the chapter? It's ok to not do so, I'm just a comedy loving man at the moment so It's something I have an urge to see... Given that my stories center around bad comedy more than anything it's only natural one such as myself would recommend this heh.

Then again... given one had a saliva problem and the other an odor problem... it must of been a ... relief for the two? I jest I jest.

Good chapter buddy keep it up.