Talk:One Life:Lost Shout Island/@comment-3507136-20120618201621

This was an excellent chapter with really creative animals!! I really liked the boxing spider as it was really amusing!! This was a very funny read and keep up the good work!

But! There were two things that bugged me!

1. You started calling the girl Kassi, as did Marcus and Richard. Yet, I didn't see her introduce her name at all. . . If she did Im sorry and must have missed it accidentally. But until thats shown I don't think she did introduce herself at all!!

2. Getting up at the speed of light seemed a little illogical for me, instead you could have said 'Stupidly fast' or 'dashed up' or other things to make it sound fast. but at the speed of light would imply that he can go that fast which would not be possible >.>

Other than that it was a really good read and keep up the good work!