Talk:Devil Game: Chapter 1 – L.O.S.T./@comment-4072803-20170201232202

And now for the third entry in the revival of...

~Zeon's Review Pirates!~

FMF's writing is rarely something that disappoints, and it maintains this streak here with aplomb. The grammar is overall good, and while some of the more "eccentric" parts took some time getting used to, it also managed to give this story a bit more of a One Piece feel to it. Some minor grammatical errors were present, and some lines felt redundant ("as you previously stated" or some such being used only a few lines later than the original statement seems a bit unnecessary". It also felt slightly like there were small changes of style at certain points (the obvious beginning and ending aside), but those weren't very difficult to get used to.

The cast of characters we're introduced to are enjoyable, to say the least. For the most part they all have their own unique quirks that make them instantly identifiable, save for maybe Amber, who's a bit of an enigma and a tide undefined at this point, switching between shonen lead and more ordinary (and sane) person the next. Names took a relatively short amount of time to catch, especially with the more noticeable ones, and I like that they each had a role to play (for the most part). No one (save maybe Amber again) felt like they were there just to fill space.

The pacing felt a little bit draggy, but it did a good job in establishing the characters and setting with a decent amount of enjoyable comedy, so I can't complain too much on that front.

The story turned out... darker, or at least in premise, than I expected for a One Piece story. Its not necessarily a bad thing, but it could be depending on the direction that it takes. After this first chapter, though, I have faith that FMF will do well by it. "Devil Island" is a bit on the nose and almost cliche in its lack of deeper meaning, but it also has a nice bluntness to it. What we've seen of the island's geography is also promising, offering the potential for a variety of scenes, from good comedy to epic fights. If anything I'd like to see a survival/death-battle themed OP story that manages to somehow stick to the main series' feel.

The title of this first chapter does feel a bit... er, I'm not sure of the word here. Acronym-ing something without any real meaning behind it seems a bit "trying too hard to be edgy" for me, but ey, I might've missed something or it might be something revealed more often.

All-in-all, a solid start and one I'd like to see more of.

Final Score: 0.89/1 Piece.