Talk:Walk in the Rain Part 2/@comment-3507136-20140708132307

Once again another enjoyed chapter.

Though some of the other readers had already noted the darkness of this chapter, I just felt the need to say that this chapter just didn't give off the one piece vibe to me this time Although where it could be captured in the first one, I just didn't see much if any of the vibe in this one.

Not to say it was not a good chapter, I enjoyed the one sided clashes of the marines with Usagi and Chio profusely. The clash between Rinji and Kola was quite riveting also, however, It became rather.. dark and morbid with the biting a chunk from the bottom of his face. All the slices and blood I could follow easily, I mean hey, Zoro bleeds about 50 gallons of blood and still lives right? Blood and battles are fine, I think you were able to get away with the bite however. Not to be ... speciesist? but Rinji is a small cat man after all, it would basically be the equivalent of a cat biting usopp or some such, just with rinji, there was more ferocity.

It lacked description on the characters again, which was disappointing to me, I would have loved to see how you explained the appearance of each individual character. Even if there is only a short time of them on the story, they should still have an appearance.

I know this may seem harsh, but I feel the need to be honest in my reviews/feedback. I'm good at being a critic! It's just a shame I can't write as well as I can critique eh?

Nonetheless, these are the starting few chapters. So I can be more lax and lenient. Good progress so far. Quite the rush to it, but in a good way.