Talk:One Adventure - Chapter 1/@comment-4080028-20140914023855/@comment-27169256-20140914032814

Pretty much everything Wyv said. He beat me to it

Only really thing I have to say about it is the fact that we need to be introduced more to the story, setting, and what kind of character you trying to focus on.

Im not a big fan of script type fan fiction but I've found some exceptions (One Dream, Grand Voyage, New Horizon). So, I do hope you can make this an exception as well.

Good luck and onto the next chapter!