Talk:In Revolutionary Assassin School - Opening/@comment-3337232-20160808171452

Arno, few things man.

One: There is some quality here. I haven't finished this chapter (Overwatch beckons me) but when I will I can give you a full review if you want. There are only two things I want to address right away for your sake.

Two: Censorship. You Might want to lay off on the sexuality just a bit. Imply it. Don't say it out right, implications work much better story wise. And plus, there's a rule against it. So implications. I can help with that one, part of the third point.

Three: I know your first language isn't english, so if you want and if you let me I will totally go through your work as I read it and correct all the grammar. It's no big deal that it's off here and there, but it'll help others understand your story better. So if you want, let me know. Go on my talk page and we can chat there, yeah?

Regards,

lvdoomien