Talk:Trials of the World, Chapter 1/@comment-4295416-20150313162048/@comment-5023449-20150313183705

Thank you for reading it, and I'm glad you enjoyed it for the most part. Allow me to explain my madness for doing things a certain way, haha.

This is my first run through of a real chapter here. So, there's gonna be many mistakes as you've noticed, haha. Please pardon me for the hopping from place to place. I personally don't notice it. Since I took so long in writing it, it didn't feel like I was hopping from place to place, haha.

There's a reason why I put quotation marks. For me, my vision isn't the greatest in the world, and on top of that, I miss things. I use it so it's more clearer for me to see when people talk, rather than confusing it with something that's not dialogue. And, I also do it just as a precaution to people that suffer from the same issues as me. I'd feel bad for them having to have trouble when reading this.

The rushing, I can understand. On top of taking forever, I really just wanted to get away from Xei. However, I regret that decision. I could tweak it here and there, but, I can't rewrite the entire chapter. Introductary chapters aren't my forte, and that's something that I need to work on in the future. So, hearing someone criticize it, makes me want to get better at it~.

A little bit of Kyoto's past has already been written. But of course, not everything~. As time progresses onward, you'll learn more about Kyoto. I'm glad you enjoyed him~. Yes, the merchants did seem like stars here, haha.

Yeah... The Music. After writing this, I decided to not add too much music to further chapters. For one, it'll be difficult finding "Island Music" to fit the theme of the island in the first place. However, I can't complete get rid of that idea, it's a work in progress~. I'll probably just add music to parts that are completely necessary, like for example the Mysterious Woman's portions, haha. I did see, however, how you had Music in your stories, and I was going to ask you how to do that. So people wouldn't have to open and close windows. However, the music itself is just optional. I can't fully make it recommended, but I do understand what ya mean~.

Thank you very much for your truthful criticism~. I will take them into account when I write my other chapters. Thank you once more for taking time to read it~.