User blog comment:Fantasy Detective/Pokemon SOF! Chapter 2: A Battle Between Friends!/@comment-4080028-20140627024802

Alright!! Well worth the wait! ^_^ This was a great follow up to the previous chapter before it! Again, I have no complaints what-so-ever about my portrayal here. You've been doing a fine job. :) And I greatly enjoyed the humor in this chapter. XD Especially our early interactions with Kai. And of course, your reaction to when Caring appeared. lol

Speaking of, I really enjoyed the battle between FD and Caring. On one hand, I loved seeing you handle a fight without me; you gave off a very awesome Usopp sort of vibe, which I found to just be downright epic. +_+ And of course, I was happy to see my sis managed to stand her ground, let alone win her battle (though I would've been happy to see you win too, FD. ^_^; ...Don't make me pick sides. T_T)

I enjoyed getting to see Wyv (me) be taken out of the action and put off to the side for now. It not only means I get to check out the cool plot stuff, :P but that I get to see more of what you and Caring are like without the main protagonist (me) getting in the way.

I also liked seeing how upset I was to witness the two of you arguing. That felt very genuine of me. Plus, it was nicely put in my opinion too; it helped to increase the tension, which would later be released in the ensuing battle. As for myself, I felt I could really connect to the character based off of me here. ^_^ Like, I could almost feel exactly what he felt. The silliness, the excitement, the concern, and so on. I think you're hitting all the right notes, FD and FMF, when it comes to writing and editing my character.

Of course, excellent job as well, FMF. It was a smart thing for you guys to add the links, as was discussed with Rinji a while ago. Though it seems right after Caring defeats FD and runs up to congratulate Pikachu, a previous line of text was used again when Pikachu responded to Caring. Just a helpful head's up, in case either of you missed it.

As was said by FMF, I liked the change of pace; from an exciting first chapter, to a more relaxed, explanatory, and plot developing second chapter. I also highly enjoyed the character development we've been seeing. I'm especially enjoying seeing FD in action here, since again, he's reminding me of Usopp, and I've always enjoyed Usopp's character development in One Piece.

To cap things off, it's exciting to see it wasn't just the two of us, and that Caring and Zeon have joined the party as well. I'm eager to see now, whom this fifth trainer will be. I also really liked how you ended the chapter. Wyv and Zeon meeting and Kai leaving his thoughts on the matter on a high note. Makes me excited for chapter 3. ^_^

Also, bonus points for making the Pokedex sound exciting, you guys. lol I never really appreciated it until now. Now it actually sounds more important and awesome than I ever gave it credit for. XD Additionally, the use of Pokémon attacks and support moves, as well as Vulpix's Drought ability was nicely done. It's very similar to what Crescent and I have in mind for our Pokémon fanfic, so I felt right at home seeing the battle unfold in front of the lab.

And finally, when Kai said he had given us our starter pokemon, does that mean he's the one who gave us Bulbasaur and Squirtle? If you can't answer this because of spoiler reasons, then please say so, and I'll leave it alone until you're ready to reveal the answer.

In short: I liked this chapter a lot. ^_^ Well done, FD and FMF!