Talk:Grand Voyage- Log 1/@comment-4080028-20140510002338

Not a bad first chapter, it was an enjoyable read. Heh, seems our hero's more entertaining for me at the moment in a solo, written work than he is when he's contending with other spotlight stealing characters in the chat (mine included.) Interesting way to have him washed ashore. Luffy ends up in a barrel, Chris gets stuck inside a sea king, and our hero (not saying his name since I don't want to spoil it for anyone else) got caught up in a hurricane. I think he may have had it the worst, in my opinion. lol

Interestingly, when I read his dialogue, the FUNimation version of Black Star's voice came to mind. o_0 Then again, given what he looks like, it may not be all too odd at all. Hehe. Also found that little bit of text at the very top to be an unusual sight. Just a bit of randomness thrown in for the reader? :P

Our marimo was certainly entertaining, and as was Sieghart. Though the chapter felt a little slow, so it's gonna take a while for me to really get pumped up or excited. But that's cool with me. Not even One Piece or Magi grabbed my interest from the first chapter or episode alone. I'll certainly be reading more, when time permits me to do so. Excellently written (with some typos here and there, and some things I didn't quite understand; like, what's a dark beach doing, lining D'Artagnan's walls?;) albeit when our "marimo" was speaking as quickly as humanly possible, it was pretty difficult to make out the exact extent of what he was saying without paying absolute attention. I suggest using hyphens or some other method to imply speed talking, if that's alright with you.

...Annnd, I began to ramble on and on. <_<; Heh... As I was trying to say, this seems like a good first chapter, bro. Didn't get me truly excited for Grand Voyage (yet,) but I did manage to sit through this and enjoy it. Looking forward to seeing how this develops in the logs to come. (I'm also surprised I'm the first to comment on this story. o_o)