Talk:The Verão Archipelago Conflict Pt 3/@comment-4080028-20160511045950

OK, so new crew, new viewpoint. ...Or should I say "mew" viewpoint? :D ... Oh I swear if Mark sees this, he may kill me for that. XD

OK, getting serious now, so blah blah grammar and spelling errors, blah blah should probably fix those, blah blah. Nothing I haven't said already that still has a valid point here. Likewise, the pacing still needs some work, since it feels like the characters are being treated more of a lesser priority than the actual plot, when in reality, characters drive the plot themselves by being themselves. But I won't beat this topic to death like I did in the 2nd chapter. Of all the Mew Pirates however, the four cat sisters, Ruby, Topaz, Sapphire and Amethyst seemed to me to be the ones with the most personality to them, so they instantly stuck out in my mind as interesting. I also like the concept of an all animal crew too; I'm looking forward to seeing how that gets explained within One Piece's bizarre logic.

However, there's this thing with the noble that got mentioned that has me worried. Does this by any chance include a World Noble, AKA a Celestial Dragon, AKA a Tenryubito? If so, I believe we've hit a major problem in this chapter that needs to be solved quickly, before things get waaaay out of control later on. If it isn't a World Noble, then I suppose all's fine.

Aside from all that, well, like with chapter 2, I'm not exactly sure what to feel about this chapter, since I hardly know the characters and the plot is moving by at a very fast speed. Kind of hard to stop and really put much thought or feeling into what I experienced there. But despite all that, I wish you luck and warm regards with your continued endeavors in writing this story of yours. Hoping my constructive criticism helps instead of deters you from progressing.