Talk:One Life:Crimson Fall/@comment-3507136-20120606234450

I loved this chapter of the story! Purely epic!!

However you asked for feedback and here it is, the grammar on these two sentence's caught my eye alot.

Richard: Any defense can be broken through!!! That's what my master thought (<= that is ment to be taught not thought :]) me!!!

Amato: You(r) master is wrong then!!

That's the only critisism i decided to give :P It was an epic story, and i pointed the above out so you could edit it :P So Amazing chapter, looking forward to reading the next ^-^