Talk:Half and Half/@comment-5008281-20141103125752

Wow, some powerful symbolism here. Although, I would not use first-person POV, you seem to pull it off quite well. I really liked how you layered this story to uncover it bit by bit as he came to realize what he had become and who his real friends and enemies were. This is definitely something you put a great bit of thought into. However, there was a bit of trouble as the pacing started off very slow, and while I did enjoy meeting our character, that is kind of the problem with the first person, you don't get a whole lot of character development through description when you are bound to just one single character.

Still when it does pick up, I really felt like I was reading a true piece of art, as your writing skill is very unique. I hope to see you continue this story.