Talk:An unmarked island and a deadly discovery! The Obsidian's accidental misadventure!/@comment-4080028-20130420230503

Nice start to this short arc of yours. The comedy in this chapter was priceless, so I highly commend you on that. And the sense of adventure was great too. Storms, whirlpools, a jungle-like island, all fun things to witness as you end up on an uncharted island. And the cliffhanger was well put. Dimitri and George vs. four strange monsters, and then just as the battle seems to begin, TO BE CONTINUED. Definately has me excited for Part 2 now. And once again, with each progressing part and chapter, i'm growing to love reading about the Obsidians more and more.

Some of my favorite comedic scenes involve George, like his crate during the storm, but the others are just as funny when you're going for that silly mood. In fact, it's difficult for me to recall everything on the spot, aside from George's crate and the fact he and Dimitri were rather enthusiastic regarding their "dinner." lol

Now with that said, I noticed a few mistakes that could be corrected. Some include "A few feet away, Marley and burn are standing over something." Seems Byrn had his name spelled differently while no one was looking. But all jokes aside, I also noticed "They both stop cutting almost in unison, and Marley turns to face George." Seems you forgot Dimitri there, bro.

I'm not sure if there's more or not, because I feel a bit pressed for time, but those two are what come to mind the easiest. Simple mistakes aside, this was an enjoyable read, which I intend to finish up on A.S.A.P. Keep up the great quality, 13th. :)