Talk:Grand Voyage- Log 5/@comment-4080028-20140530094750

Alright! The action begins! +_+ This is a nice start and development for Grand Voyage's first major battle. I'm really enjoying seeing Knave go at it against Don Cazzuto, as well as Art facing off against Ice John. Still rooting for them to kick Cazzuto and John's asses. Though speaking of Ice John, I can't help but wonder what kind of odd ability he must have to instantly mold and freeze water like that. o_0

Though I gotta say, my favorite part of this whole chapter is the first scene. Especially when Knave and Art decide to pay the Cazzuto Family back for what they did. It just screamed "badass One Piece pre-battle build up moment." +_+ I think that scene was wonderfully done. Doesn't need anything more added to it, or anything taken out. It just felt so right to me.

Oh, and on one final note, I fount two mistakes. One being that you wrote "temporarily" instead of "temporary," when detailing the after effects of the cafe's arson. The other typo was during Cazzuto's reveal, where you typed "color" instead of "collar."

Anyway, once again, very nice chapter. ^_^ Grand Voyage is coming along real nicely.